Making My Writing Deep 3rd POV

A submissions editor once told me to tighten up my manuscript before submitting. I had no idea what that meant. I'm still learning. However, one thing I struggle through is reducing the amount of filter words in my work.

What are filter words? Basically, any word that separates the reader from the character. Here's a starter list:
  • see 
  • hear
  • think
  • touch
  • wonder
  • realize
  • watch
  • look
  • seem
  • feel
  • can
  • decide
  • sound
  • know
  • notice
  • experience
One small example...

Instead of using"see," just write what the character sees.

Go from...
He saw the cat climb up the tapestry.

The cat climbed up the tapestry.

Removing filter words from my work has been both the toughest and most rewarding work I've done as a writer. The result is tighter, crisper prose. The trick is to begin thinking that way. I'm still figuring things out as I continue on my journey as a writer in pursuit of deep third person POVs.


Introducing Margaret Brown...

Margaret Brown is a poet from Philadelphia. She attends numerous open mics in the area and has organized her own events. Please read below to learn about this remarkable woman.

1) Given the tendency for authors to have many favorite books, what a favorite book of yours?
     - My favorite book is "The Color Purple" by Alice Walker.

2) Besides reading/writing, what do you like to do for fun?
     - Besides writing, I like to do crafts, bowl and bake.

3) What/Who inspired you to write?
     - My brother inspired me to write.

4) How many projects have you completed/published?
     - I have ten projects completed, eight published and one chapbook with other poets.

5) What are their genres?
     - My genre is poetry.

6) What’s your most/least favorite thing about being a writer?
     - My biggest lesson learned from being a published writer was choosing the right publisher.

7) What do you consider as the biggest lesson learned from being a published writer?
     - I've learned to read the fine print, do the research on publishers and ask established authors.

8) Any final words?
     - Readers can find my writings on my fan page on facebook "Margaret's Writings", Amazon  and B&N.

9) Where can readers find your writings? (online and brick/mortar bookstores)
     - Fans can fine my writings on Margaret Writing's on Facebook, AmazonTwitter, Instagram B&N.

10) Where can fans find you online?
     - FB fan page: Margaret's Writings


Accomplishments in 2017

What a challenging year...2017! Nevertheless, I accomplished a few of my writing goals:
  • Released the print format of Billiard Buddies in February
  • Signed a contract for If It Kills Me with Keith Publications in October
  • Finished typing in all the scenes (clocked at ~74 hours) from loose sheets and notebooks in November
I'd been pursuing the third goal for a few years, so it felt great finally completing that one. Once again, I'm grateful to the South Jersey Writers' Group for holding a class on making SMART (Smart, Measurable, Achievable, Relevant, Time Limited) goals. I'd used this approach for my day job but had never thought of using it for my writing projects. It worked so well in 2017 that I'm doing it again in 2018.

Looking forward to what I can accomplish next.


Starting out 2018 with a win

On January 18th, the South Jersey Writers' Group awarded me first place in their Poetry Contest. Surprise and gratefulness are two words that come to mind. After experiencing some personal loss, having others appreciate "I Exist. Hear Me" encouraged me in a meaningful way.

I wrote this poem at a time of an internal battle to forge ahead despite all the negative phrases running through my mind...phrases I'd heard over the years from those whose opinions I'd valued.

On January 26th, I had the opportunity to read "I Exist. Hear Me" at the South Jersey Writers Group Open Mic.

My poem will be published on the South Jersey Writers' Group soon, a benefit of winning the competition. I will post here after that happens, so stay tuned.

Thank you South Jersey Writers' Group for your continual support. Check out their blog.


Publish the Dream Event

I will be one of a panel of speakers at this event. I am so looking forward to sharing what I've learned about publishing with other.


Middle School Student Review of "Sisters of the Last Straw: The Case of the Flower Phantom" by Karen Kelly Boyce

Sisters of the Last Straw: The Case of the Flower Phantom

This book is centered on the point that one of the sister’s cousins has come to visit. The cousin named Gabby is receiving these flowers from a mysterious person. But the note in the flower always just says, “I KNOW”. The sisters try to figure this mystery out by themselves with no help from the police.

This book is an easy read. This book also makes you feel like you care for the characters. I would highly recommend this book for young readers under the age of thirteen.

Tai, 8th Grade



Middle School Student Review of "Sisters of the Last Straw: the Case of the Stolen Rosaries" by Karen Kelly Boyce

Sisters of the Last Straw: The Case of the Stolen Rosaries

This book series is about nuns who are trying to get over their bad habits while solving mysteries. In this third book of the series, the nuns have a gift shop that they need to sell things from to buy things for the poor as well as themselves. But someone keeps breaking into the shop and steals the rosaries which are the nun’s best seller. The nuns get the police to help, but they also try to figure it out by themselves.

This book is a very fun and easy read. I would highly recommend this book for young readers under the age of thirteen.

Tai, 8th Grade